[UnbornBuddha]

Your very talented, your writing is structured, and the multisyllabic patterns are on point. Although your writing incorporates the abstract parts of existence, and almost fuses them in a nexus of a perspective that resembles a nihilist, or existentialist of some sort.
Yet at the same time you use many naturalist derived themes, as well as many other modern related themes, and concepts such as science, and pharmaceutical inspired metaphors. Your writing seems very fluid, but it is a little bit hard to understand due to the almost randomness of the concepts linked together. It does imply you have a very strong imagination.
This 3 lines particularly stood out for me, especially the last three.
"barely focused, talent natural like chamomile. or yoga
composite grain alcohol and standard neurosis
blocking cellular functioning like a handful of Motrin
cognitive closure. meditative padmasana, the lotus"

The last two had this certain relativity to it that is displays the knowledge you possess. The very fact you stated cognitive closure to a specific meditative pose implies a certain knowledge, or research you've clearly done into the practice, and its implication on the mind/ senses.

In retrospect I liked it.