[dead man]

Violent moods, depression, silent rooms, compression

i think theres a certain degree more expected from a member (of this site in particular) that is not only a frequent contributor to the disc forum but has become a character of sorts in the social dynamic of the website. you are a prevalent personality on NC and as such, anything you write (especially something personal and revealing) tends to garner more attention than that of a person who does not participate very actively in the more 'social' realms of the site.

people already feel they know you so your writing reinforces that. i, on the other hand, reveal myself almost exclusively through this weird sort of writing. say what you will but i prefer it this way.

moreover, there is a certain pretension and expectation going into a verse of yours based on the personality and troll persona you've developed. it surprises some and may even change their opinion on the work itself. none of this is absolutely relevant to the verse but they are all things to be considered when viewing a work. context is always important. nothing in this field is objective.

the fact that you haven't received any commentary on this is a bit staggering. maybe people are intimidated or perhaps not used to seeing you around these parts.

this struck me as a bit melodramatic if I'm being honest. the letter to myself and others, farewell for i am dying now because of my mistakes is sort of a well beaten path at this point. i hope you can understand that.

what struck me most surprising is your technical ability to translate a thought or feeling into such succinct and relatable rhyme-work. not terribly typical for someone who focuses primarily on battling and really one of the cornerstones of written work that i believe is very pigeonholed in the battling realm.

its nice to take a breath and write with freedom now and again. its almost a shame so many of us only find ourselves channeling the negativity but thats the melancholic creative mind at work says the science.

the capt. obvious quote was a highlight for sure.

this was a bit vague and overly idiomatic for my taste but you are clearly testing the waters here. this was very interesting for what it was. i found myself back in here skimming the lines and relating them to the anecdotes youve revealed in disc about your situations and whatnot. whether honest or not, we always look for a pattern.

i hope you continue to write and post work in here strik.

thanks


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