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Geno · 07-16-2014, 02:42 PM

hello
have you been living up to your responsibilities as a good responder in my OM?

hope so.

cool post, still think your bars are to long and hold to many commas, try using only one comma per line and then start a new line, it still reads the same . it just makes it easier and more clear for the reader. also helps for the person who may have a beat on and isnt the longest winded person in the world while hes reciting

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07-16-2014, 02:42 PM	#8
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	hello have you been living up to your responsibilities as a good responder in my OM? hope so. cool post, still think your bars are to long and hold to many commas, try using only one comma per line and then start a new line, it still reads the same . it just makes it easier and more clear for the reader. also helps for the person who may have a beat on and isnt the longest winded person in the world while hes reciting 1 __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*