botw id say
cereal killa
you had some sick schemes
Mocked and caged.. Shaved, stomped and bathed
that sort of thing was ill. there were a couple of instances of it aside from this as well. anyways your flow was dope as fuck and you really didnt need to sacrifice word choice for it, everything was crispy clear and there were only maybe one or two instances where the great imagery lost clarity, although the flow was solid throughout. the idea was slick and the cannabilistic monolgue seemed interspersed with commentary on the current meat/slaughterhouse industry. there were a lot of double entendres that i thought could relate to both. sick
kuja - this was also slick. cereals rhymes were better but yours werent too bad. imagery was standard, nothing described in eye-catching language but the images were clear. the ending was great, the story overall was great, actually. original and ive been doing this for some time. everything from the plan going wrong to the way the climax panned to the red neon sign at the end was well done. really strong but i think what did you in was your lack of excellence in the rhyme department. it wasnt bad at all but it wasnt great either
v - cereal killa, mostly for superior flow and his social commentary mixed in there.
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