[Split]

there’s no bad dreams at wakes & if provoked u bite your nails

first half of that line was fire but the second half felt weirdly placed, maybe shouldve been reversed or put somewhere else


saw the light that paved the way but a mother’s hope denied the trail
u have to cope & find your sail… the winds are blowing south
north is where u should be but self-pity’s sting’s not slowing down
violins make golden sounds… its melodies begging to follow

little abstact for me but carrying the metaphor was nice.

While enemies keep sending u their complementary bottles
Exemplary struggles, it’s the perfect way to initiate those in pain
substitutes are short term solutions but it alleviates most the shame

i thought the verbs didnt fit the lines in this part, but i get what youre saying anyways and its a good observation. "complementary bottles" is dope imagery/ symbolism i would never of thought of


where do the cynical meet? The 13th floor’s vacancy troubles many
but luck isn’t an emotion

word.


& we all at some point will struggle plenty

naw



pretty cool piece, maybe im being too critical but the concepts/ meaning of your verse was great and said way more than most people do in a verse, but i thot your delivery was off in a bunch of places. that said you bring a lot fresher shit to the table w/ your message than most. keep keyin