Kin: Ugh. That's not wordplay. That's various associated words in random order. And none of it is clever. You're facing a known commodity on this site. Why no personals? Nothing was interesting here. The generic lines didn't actually seem like punches. The only positive is that the cadence and rhymes were good. But this was not a battle verse.
Alvin Karpis: You got this on the first line. It was personal, accurate, clever and well-worded. Good work. The rest was solid, easily the best verse of the six I've read this week. Kindle and Atkin were OK name plays. The gay stripper thing was lame. But again, you won with the opener.
Vote: Alvin Karpis
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