Netcees - View Single Post - Round 2: 7. timeless vs. 2. Vividlyvague \\ timeless wins 3-2

King Ra. · 07-13-2014, 01:31 AM

This was a rather weird match up. At first glance, it seems like an easy vote because of the length of timeless' piece in comparison to Vivid's. But this is definitely much, much closer when reading both pieces. I have a hard time choosing who wins because both of you were sporadic and uncertain in your directions.

timeless, I had a hard time trying to understand your direction. The sporadic bouncing throughout I understand, because apparently its based on a dream? but when tying everything together to the topic or an overall point, I just can't see it. You had some moments where you had good phrases and other moments where it seemed unnecessary/forced. Sometimes felt like you were packing in too much to fit in with your story. The first two stanzas threw me off. You sort of switched up and it didn't transition well. That's another knock I have with your piece. The transitioning between stanzas was off somewhat. While there were many flaws, as I mentioned earlier, you had some good lines throughout. Also, your rhyming for the most part was on point outside of a few hiccups. Overall, it was a risky direction, I commend you for being ambitious, but maybe it was too ambitious?

Vivid, you must have not really had the time or put in the time to put together a complete piece, and just like Zenland in round one and Certain in this round, you took a hand in paragraph form. While you weren't as sporadic as your opponent, you left much to be desired by the time I got to the end of your story. You sort of went a similar direction as timeless, seems like you also inserted a dream like theme, except yours was more tight knit. I just wish this was much longer though. The rhyming was on point, and you had some cool phrases as well. Your piece was more of a traditional topical drop, though I'm surprised you didn't formulate a story which is your strength. Like timeless, its difficult for me to see the connection to the topic clearly, but despite the length of your piece, and because of timeless sporafic showing, you did enough to warrant a closer match than at first glance.

This is a hard one to choose. Both pieces didn't clearly tie to the topic well, I felt both of you could have done more to make it clearer. This will come down to who I felt was closest to presenting a more clearer picture. At first thought, I felt despite timeless' sporadic display story wise, he packed in enough to get my vote. Then reading Vivid's short piece, despite it's lack of content he was more precise in the little he put together. Very difficult. I'm going to take the other route as oats did and go with Vivid. A lot of timeless story could easily be cut out to make for a more cleaner piece, but I feel Vivid was a bit more closer to the topic and had a clearer direction.

MVGT: Vividlyvague. Good job by both competitors.

07-13-2014, 01:31 AM	#9
King Ra. The Throne, The Crown Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,667 Battle Record: 21-35 Rep Power: 1932963	This was a rather weird match up. At first glance, it seems like an easy vote because of the length of timeless' piece in comparison to Vivid's. But this is definitely much, much closer when reading both pieces. I have a hard time choosing who wins because both of you were sporadic and uncertain in your directions. timeless, I had a hard time trying to understand your direction. The sporadic bouncing throughout I understand, because apparently its based on a dream? but when tying everything together to the topic or an overall point, I just can't see it. You had some moments where you had good phrases and other moments where it seemed unnecessary/forced. Sometimes felt like you were packing in too much to fit in with your story. The first two stanzas threw me off. You sort of switched up and it didn't transition well. That's another knock I have with your piece. The transitioning between stanzas was off somewhat. While there were many flaws, as I mentioned earlier, you had some good lines throughout. Also, your rhyming for the most part was on point outside of a few hiccups. Overall, it was a risky direction, I commend you for being ambitious, but maybe it was too ambitious? Vivid, you must have not really had the time or put in the time to put together a complete piece, and just like Zenland in round one and Certain in this round, you took a hand in paragraph form. While you weren't as sporadic as your opponent, you left much to be desired by the time I got to the end of your story. You sort of went a similar direction as timeless, seems like you also inserted a dream like theme, except yours was more tight knit. I just wish this was much longer though. The rhyming was on point, and you had some cool phrases as well. Your piece was more of a traditional topical drop, though I'm surprised you didn't formulate a story which is your strength. Like timeless, its difficult for me to see the connection to the topic clearly, but despite the length of your piece, and because of timeless sporafic showing, you did enough to warrant a closer match than at first glance. This is a hard one to choose. Both pieces didn't clearly tie to the topic well, I felt both of you could have done more to make it clearer. This will come down to who I felt was closest to presenting a more clearer picture. At first thought, I felt despite timeless' sporadic display story wise, he packed in enough to get my vote. Then reading Vivid's short piece, despite it's lack of content he was more precise in the little he put together. Very difficult. I'm going to take the other route as oats did and go with Vivid. A lot of timeless story could easily be cut out to make for a more cleaner piece, but I feel Vivid was a bit more closer to the topic and had a clearer direction. MVGT: Vividlyvague. Good job by both competitors. __________________ Vetwork, bitches.