ya definitely a very sick battle. now i see what RM brings to the table and i gotta say, the style is slightly different from the people that usually board here. excellent story telling. happy that you guys are part of this league. its beggining to meld many different forums together and its interesting to watch.
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cereal killa - classic centered topical verse. i mean that in a good way. before i wrote topicals i always saw these long ass centered verses and this was a perfect representation of that. it had a very good flow, though the structure was hmmm i dont want to say undisciplined but more, not so strict. you let it breath. and it was better because of it. the flow was dope felt a little like long bar as i read it, despite the line breaks. content wise you used abstract descriptions to describe basic things. a very nice writing method. you are definitely talented. and i appreciate being able to read your stuff. i gotta admit, the length of this verse kicked my ass a little. but i got through it without getting bored. sick verse.
kuja - another sick verse. at first it seemed like it was gonna be kinda basic, but the story telling got into such great depth that it overcame the simple vocab. its hard to move a story along and use abstract and complicated words, what you were able to do , is tell the plot, move it along all while giving us a glimpse into the emotion and thinking that each characther was feeling. thats tough to do. good work. the ending seemed a tad abrupt, but i liked the twist that the roller coaster was named the death.
overall- great battle. thanks for the reads fellas. extremely even battle here. i think i liked cereal killas slightly more but..... kuja tackled the topic more directly. and for me that pushed his verse over the edge so im gonna give him the win.
vote - kuja
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