CERTAIN..NOW FINISH HIM
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Originally Posted by YDK
your piece forreal had me in tears.
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0 w8.
This was a good battle. I had a clear winner, after about the second read, and it pains me to say it.
Oats came out with an ode to his Hawaiian counterpart. Which is cool. I liked it. I liked it, and I liked it. IT was cool. IT was great. It was simple. Too simple. There wasnt really anything to it. It was just an ode, a rhyming demographic to a career, and the effect it had on him personally (which was a cool touch). But it seemed to predictable. My recipe is, if its predictable, make it great. If it's complex, make it simple. This just read too much into it and didnt really cooperate with the topic as Id like it to be, and I know you can do it in.
Certain, my quarrel with you is that you suck. You used to be good, but maybe it's because I transferred some of my chakra to you via telepathy. Now that I've stopped granting these powers, you've become human, and with your time constraints, you'll get fucked up with the big dogs. Luckily, for you, oats spared you. This can be lovely for Oats, if he wins. ButI don't think he has it here. My least liked part of this verse, was the third one, idk who that is, I forget. The brilliant daughter. It was soooooooo rushed, and so fixated. It really was pretty bad and monotone. And sort of sucked out the OOMPH of the other little paragraph snippets. You did enough. Didn't live up to the hype and extremely close. Certain