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Certain never @'s me to vote, and I'm truly hurt bout dis!!!!!!!!!!!! You so FUCKA stupid idiyote certain.....all u need is ask..and i do....dat all...but u FUCKa hard HEADED as fuc.....neva listen to bb..eva..
YDK has a very average writing here. Before I start, I though adonis had a lot of words that seemed misplace, or phrases that could have been worded better for a better effect, both rhythmically, sensically, (lol) and just to give a more metaphorical feel to the already metaphorical feeley verse. Especialy the part where you say 'fiscal cycle of breath.' that seemed awfully misplaced and just so hard to interpret in an already scuffled yet intriguingly nice verse. Fiscal breath without the cycle and expanding on that may have been a clearer and better route than the one you took. YDK's take was perhaps a bit monotone, in the way he cornered and systemically broke down each line and phrase for the transition, but adonis's overall feministic theme wore a bit down, especially when using thematic language like her, she, etc.
Stylistically, I think, even given the topic..this works towards YDK's advantage. He doesn't blow readers away with his efforts, but what he does deliver is tenacity and you can always expect the best from him. Adonis' given, his..brash, just raw usage of words, usually caters to a phrasing of the unknown, such as imagination, and creativity, but it seemed to hurt him here, or not work to his advantage. Sort of like if LeBron is geared towards a more big man style of play rather than a pull up jump shooter, but he struggles if the opposition has any defensive big men, that are akin to that style of play. That seemed to be the problem here. YDK almost seemed to give a whatever response here and the repetitive second chorus like stanza seemed a bit misplaced and useless imo, though figuring in seemed to be usable in its content. YDK seemed to be at peace with the topic given its mediocre like take. Both could have done way better. Will break down further if needed. YDK