ok, this was better than the crazy rhying paagraph. at least you were telling a story. it seemed childish though. you need more of a shock factor in your delivery amongst other things.
story is cool. the way you worded it sucked. but the gist was there
and yo.. you really need to drop some feedback on other peoples shit if your gonna be bombarding my OM with three verses back to back. cant be flooding it with your shit and not showing love to others
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