[Cereal_Killa]

UMM I dunno whats going on here so I’ll vote like it’s a match up..


Mike:
This was to the point and brutally powerful.. A traditional piece of emotive poetry that consciously hits at the readers heart.. You have a subtle but tight rhyme structure with clear and precise wording.. I was a fan of this piece.. In all honesty you got to drop the /’s cause it breaks up the readers flow too much and takes away from the inner thoughts and feelings of your character..

“held a flower too tight, despite being severed by thorns”
Beautiful line.. kind of reminded of the lines used in audioslaves – I am the highway

Brilliant piece of writing, the one real problem was not the /’s it was you’re in a story league where you are going to have to use all this emotion to make a fully developed story with twist, a minor climax, revelation etc.. to compete with some of the outrageous stories that come from this board.. Still you’re a magnificent writer and your poetic verse could very well be enough to take this match.. Nice one..

Red:
Lol man once the wizard came into his form with about 10 bars left it put a huge smile on my face.. the whole atmosphere you had constructed had turned.. from the dark environment surrounding your witch to a colourful realm somewhat like the disney film “sword in the stone” .. All due to the solid placement of your vocab delivering it with “dark humour”.. Dude this was sick, flow was hot.. it jarred a lil by the end but tbh compared to how butter the first ¾ was it does not matter.. This was constantly moving, with amazing characters.. Man really solid piece..

Vote = red glare

This will easily come down to personal preference.. I like heavy worded verses that still develop and deliver a woven story.. Saying that Wrecka’s emotional piece was still pure fire..

I hope this match gets aloud to run.. I would like to see what happens.. gl guys..