My flow is better.
Your rhymes and wordplays are pretty basic but this was still cool to read, you have a good grasp of flow and wording, try different words other than the obvious...just makes it more interesting.
Good job tho, should sound nice recorded.
Don't be posting something you wrote and expect the spelling not to be critiqued tho, that's silly.
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