to deep for me to speculate, i really wish i could, and i tried hard. The lines i could understand were awesome, like...
"to empathize from distances and fake it in person
let her cherry glow in darkness to create a diversion
feel her breath rise like worship. our embrace, so imperfect
lungs break beneath the weight of inertia. exhale again"
these lines reminded me of people in trenches, because snipers can see smokers from a distance as cherrys glowing in the dark. And they way you were talking about breathe made me think of a snipers breathe control etc. idk if that was intentional, ur writing is so descriptive its easy find unintentional meanings...
the flow and rhyme scheme was good, not as fancy as your newest post with witty, but good. noticed no blemishes.
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