Inno: Vague piece like the others said but really it wasn't as bad to me as the others were saying. In fact I enjoyed reading it especially since some of the lines read like tongue twisters with the alliteration throughout. That was dope, but the only negative to me is saying to be more clear in your piece next week like the others have said as well. I think you rushed this one this week.
patrown: A more clear and descriptive story than that of Inno's but to be perfectly honest, I really didn't enjoy it. No offense but it just kinda bored me but you did hit the topic on the head and props for that. As far as your writing ability the syllable count in some lines were longer in some than they were in the others which really fucked me up as I was reading it. But all in all I'd say it was a good drop with clear emotion behind it.
Honestly this one could go either way, but I gotta go with patrown
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