[Adonis]

Jah, I liked the verse for what it was, and the flow and cadence fit the them perfectly while not slipping in any fashion. I don't have much to say about mechanics and shit however because they were solid no falter. The concept and execution however, seemed a bit played and easy as far as topicals go. I did like how you big up'd your opponent in my eyes by saying you will rise. sure, that was the topic, but I took it as you conceding almost, literally. I know that was not your intention, but you aren't getting my vote and I think in a sense you knew you played down given procrastination and lack of times sake, that what you were posting was really nothing. I do think if you actually fleshed this topic out with a bit more innuendo and hidden subtext that shit would have been fresh braggadocia rather then this. all in all, it was a good read with about 35 fewer lines that would have been required for you to win, although I think you were straight to the point, just not a good point.

Dave, I actually really liked this style. I think I said that to you before. when you posted something similar stylistically. when we battled. or at some point you did the paragraph style and I distinctly remember commending you for taking that leap into the relatively unknown and doing it well. I like the emotion on the sleeve, although I've grown tiresome from it. When I first read this on my phone the screen is so small that it gave nice breaks between periods for me. Now that I'm reading on the comp, I realize I don't miss the paragraph style. I do love the flow that you tucked away snugly into the crevices, but it was the opposite of overbearing and I think, given the format you chose, you had the open possibility of that free lance, free flowing heavy winded rhyme structure, it was there for the taking.


In all honesty, this was not a great battle, while I like Jah's flow and mechanics mountains above Zen's, Jah just seemed to play it safe, maybe too safe. On the other hand I loved the open book of Dave, however the format proved archaic, and the style, or route of topic, seems a bit over done at this point.


I changed my vote.

King Ra.