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Originally Posted by Big Game
Did this bum think he’d take the win - one hit will fucking break his chin
Take a look at his name again – who don’t know LSD’s paper-thin?
Basic, but decent nameflip- the punch of 'paper thin' could've been set up better
Your verse aint rhyme one time – and I don’t want to stir confusions
Cos I know ya thought it was rhyming but L - that was pure illusions
Statement, also kind of a feed. Wouldn't call this a hit
I come to damage ya amateur – my hits collapsing your scapula
You and your verse headed South and I aint talkin bout back in to Africa
Setup and punch weren't really connected, punch itself was alright, but a little basic
Your drop was all statements and that statement there was coerced
Or maybe that was your expos – so where the fuck is your verse???
I see what you're trying to say here, but the approach was weak - ironically enough it became statementish itself
Expressing aggression straight coming at me all rude and cocky
Dudes mad as hell – sure that verse aint part two of the illuminati?
Lines like this need to be just standalone funny to hit, this wasnt tho
I aint even gonna come with rawl shit - I aint even gonna take my time
You’re like an aids infested coce whore - on you I wouldn’t waste a line
Wp is there, but really basic. Seen this sort of thing enough to call it a miss
But If I fuel these bars with hatred they become explosive homie
Fucking terrorize your South African ass like I was Joseph Kony
Kony is in Uganda, and this was really more statementish too
Dawg you was falling regardless – and this here was just an ad-lib
You got dropped – but to make ya feel better, go head and call it a bad trip
Your strongest line, but the setup was lacking
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Quick little feed from my phone. You seem to have your fundamentals down, but the concepts were generally a little lacking. I'd recommend signing into AOBL, a few weeks of that would really shape you up