Had to go through both verses a second time to come to a decision. Both came nicely with a concept and developed it well throughout their piece. Brass i really enjoyed reading your piece flow and rhyme scheme were on point, well written here...and what i really liked about your verse was the consistency, you remained in tact throughout the whole piece. Topical , the imagery in your piece really surprised me...wording like the above 2 said tho kinda took a bit out of the effectiveness of your verse though. Nonetheless i really liked it. Gotta say i thought brass slightly edged this one with the better execution
v/ Brass
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