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Old 06-24-2014, 05:04 PM   #9
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Now I feel like a dick after black decides to leave that much feed. Thanks allot.

This was very good writing though, I don't think anyone would say it wasn't. The first thing I tend to look at it in a piece is the rhyme schemes, and this didn't disappoint in that regard. Some cool multi's added emphasis to a great story that was heartfelt. Sad, but real. The strongest points in the verse were the italicized lines at the beginning and the end, especially the end. Very cool. Glad to see you in the om brah.
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