It was good in a quiet way, like you wrote this piece to record a landmark emotional feeling. My instincts tell me this was about your proposal in Brazil. In the beginning, you had your vintage spoken word flow that'd appeal to a crowd. You used sufficient examples and even disclosed some of your vulnerabilities in the game of love with the romantic detachment line. I've never been in love personally so I've nothing significantly valuable to offer in the way of improving this. Writing-wise, it was tightly executed. Memorable? Somewhat.
Keep doing you
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