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Old 06-15-2014, 03:24 AM   #2
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Hello Genocide, this was another well written audio verse. You really have the concept mastered. Hopefully you're saving all of your written texts to be recorded one day, I would like to hear a lot of these as a real track. The verse itself although technically solid was slightly confusing to me content wise. You had commented earlier in my verse that you couldn't relate because you never had money for the nice cars etc. but then your very first line was about your whip and you continued to mention Madagascar passports, tripping over dead bodies and killing people. I guess to me it just felt phony because you don't normally write like this and I almost felt cheated and let down that you just made up some fictional content to fill your verse with. Again, the writing itself was great but this subject matter didn't seem to fit you.
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