[Cereal_Killa]

zee:
This was dope.. I love the ideas you worked with in this verse, piecing together events outside of the box to make an extremely interesting story.. See i believe there is no single or definite answer for anything; even Lewis Carroll's nonsensical riddle has more than one answer.. To me things are made/done for a combination of reasons and the beauty of this piece is,
though your personal take on religion, from its birth to its existence was the good ol' common (power and greed) the story you told to back this up was magnificent..
You pieced together, slot by slot events that clearly show your point - that "in god we trust" really is worth what its printed on.. so if you don't mind knowing every time you spend it, it was built on the blood of others.. You should have a grand time keeping this shin'dig called capitalism alive :)

I think flow was on point in this opening stanza but started drifting.. I mean its tough you did have a lot to say..
Vocab strong and point of view, writers voice and impact was fucken A grade..
Your transitions where the main flaw, and not for all of it just by half way.. It was jumping from thought to thought towards the end like you where dot pointing me a presentation.. lol
But like i said as a reader you clearly get the message, it just turns into a bumpy ride halfway.. Ultra cool verse non the less bloke..


Bent-holio:
Umm god daem what an absolute fucken gem of a title.. Im just saying.. Now i got that out of the way what a brilliant and colourful tale.. I mean shit dude despite your vibrant use of the old English language in a modern format, you flowed the tits of this bull so to speak.. Hit for hit - word for word as a reader i was overwhelming trapped inside your environment and the events that took place.. the rhythmic pace and development of the story progressed at a solid level.. The structure was hot.. Originality on story hot, with the underlined "eye for eye" with a holy arm as the connection/relic..
Man you crazy..

vote = iambent

Wow straight up this was an amazing battle - like im just throwing it out there, writers like both of you are what will help develop this league into something ungodly.. yet ohh so beautiful :)

Tight job peeps..