[IamBenT]

Wow fantastic battle.

Adonis - What an epic piece. From beginning to end, the narrative is controlled, the scheme is consistent yet creative and varies at times to keep me from falling asleep, the boldface chorus is a fantastic touch which kept me reading all the way through and in suspense to find out who this was (a lover to a muse?? wtf?) and then you really brought it home in the end with a fresh perspective on the human experience. Really liked this verse.

Vinzr - I think this verse had a great deal of potential. Its obvious you are a master of flow and word choice, your ability to create mood and tension is evident as well. Love your treatment of the topic, but I just couldn't find a way to identify with your speaker or WHY it was so crucial for them to rest. The death twist was interesting and more could have been done with that.

Vote - Adonis for creativity and polish.