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Old 06-11-2014, 12:01 AM   #7
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Sometimes I'm high on life. Skipping home as birds sing in the shining light within the grove.
Sometimes I'm tryna fight each time I'm hyped on adrenochrome.

it always takes more than one read for me to catch all the rhyme work you weave into something like this. not sure how intentional that may be but it works in your favor given the attention deficit that plagues most of us in here. or maybe not?

i am not quite sure whether i love or hate this particular aspect of your writing. its fun to read but not very transporting. the term transporting refers to the ability of any medium to take an observer outside themselves for the moment. immerse them in your work.

this was lightweight for you but it looked like a lot of fun to write and it was entertaining at the least. almost poppy in a sense.

keep your keeping on dear buddhai.

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