Zenland - Decent verse, sometimes I think you and Witty are twin brothers because you both write very similarly, armed with concise support beams of writing and deploying straightforward points of view. This one was just okay this week. I could find tangible intensity in the character's voice due to his crappy life situation but other than that there was no fire within. Too calm.
King Ra - The wrathfulness was convincing though I don't know if what you brought to the table was enough. Starting off a beginning line with 'and' is tricky because it's almost like you're skipping the traditional step of introducing a world, or a world through story, by giving it the proper curtains-opening sequence. It felt like a half bitten cookie, IMO. Decent writing in this one.
Vote - Zenland
The clear winner for me.
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