Bladed Thesis - Enjoyed the story and lyricism in this. Kinda cool how you played on the aliens having a connection to the pyramids thing, and adding the notion that aliens need water to survive along with a rather sexual needs along with a rather primitive yet effective thought that aliens have ulterior motives for visiting earth. Mentioning technology and pyramids is kinda interesting as they've found a battery from the time of when the pyramids was created, so that was cool. The every 50 year thing was interesting as well and could explain why there's been UFO sighting, haha.
Overall I enjoyed your verse although I feel like it was rather vague to being on topic when it comes down it. Sure, the title connects to it and the aliens needed water, but I didn't really feel like ''All of the water on Earth has turned black'' had any significant impact.
Patrown - Interesting choice, and more importantly: Interesting verse. Got kind of a 1960's horror feel to it. Felt like you explained it well and the take on it was creative, but would have liked a longer verse better.
Vote - Patrown. Very creative battle, but I felt Patrown got it on creativity, he also nailed the topic although the story was rather short. Bladed Thesis had a better rhymescheme going, but I thought the connection to the topic at hand was rather vague. I felt the battle was close, but Patrown edged it with a more creative verse and a better overall feel. Pretty cool battle.
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