Adonis: I liked this verse in a context vacuum. But, "One day, someone leans over and drops something unusual into your case." So, where was that? I guess the idea was that the kid's dancing and listening was a special gift to you, but the topic is pretty clear. And even if you ignore the second half of the topic, as you seemed to, more than half of the verse is simply about being a street musician. Now, you wrote it well, with sharper rhymes and cadence than you often show. I think you're rounding yourself into fine playoff form and could be an actual threat to take the title, which I did not expect entering the season based on your Season 2 quality. I just didn't think you connected with your topic enough here.
zygote: This felt like something by Ingmar Bergman, which is a pretty big compliment. The dialogue and emotion was very authentic, and you did what King Ra. did this week in throwing me into the middle of a scene that explained itself. That gave you freedom. I liked the play choice, though it was a surprising risk for a title match verse. At this point, you had your No. 2 seed sewn up and were able to do something unique. This happened to really work for me, so it will be interesting to see what others think.
Vote: zygote
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