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Cyph her - You're painting a cool picture with the words and how you choose to attack the topic. Not really huge fan of the rhymescheme although I can see how it connects. xbxb - kind of rhymescheme. Effective to not create longbars, but not so effective to the overall feel imo. It's different and I like a breath of fresh air, but that's about it. Seems almost half assed since there wasn't really much more thought put into it except for some internals here and there. Not that I could see, I've failed doing that before so feel free to put me in my place if I did when the thread is closed.

Beside of that the story itself is cool, I enjoyed how you approached the story with the second chance concept. Some character development going on and a nice turn of events leading to the last stanza. Overall I liked this one.

Certain - I really like how the story progressed. It had a natural progression throughout. I think this would have turned out to be better as a short story. It definitely works the way it is now, but I think a short story would do the story you got going more justice. My only question would be how the guy knew his name though, like out of nowhere dude suddenly knows who he is? There's some mystery surrounding the guy with the note, but still... As far as it goes for the end; sometimes the comfort of being set for life is more important than your initial/main hobby. Cool shit.

Vote - Certain. I vote for him as I felt he had a more thorough story and the progression seemed more natural. I also enjoyed his story abit more. I did however like Cyph Her's set up of the piece, it was unique stylistically and I like that but it was not enough to snatch my vote. Cool battle.