[Adonis]

Cert - A very well executed story that kept intrigue through out. The rhymes were on point, but when names and streets are used as rhymes it always sounds weak to me. "Pine and take". Not only that but you followed it up with "eight and take" again. For shame. You had your way with this story though I must admit. You paced it nicely and kept the transitions of rhyme hidden behind dialogue and pace. As for the story it self, not the writing or writer, it was enjoyed. I liked the ending as, it was honest. There was no mirror or trick, just a simple, money is awesome message. Good verse. I refuse to comment on the fact your work load is strenuous between mag .voting. writing. real life. But solid verse. Not something that is "champion" worthy, but solid none the less.

Cyph - Solid message. There were wording issues sprinkled through out..."I’ll dually comply, and I don’t know why I do"...I don't know why I do does work, although it just reads awkward. The rhymes were there, although considering the shortened line length they seemed far between. I did notice the a,b,a,b, scheme riddled through out, which is nice to get a different view on schemes, but still, I think you lacked in that department as there were no multies, just end rhymes far between. The story was cool, and I enjoyed it, but I also enjoyed your counter parts, so considering he had, IMO, better flow and rhyme I must give it to him.


Voting Certain. I think Cypher is at her best while packing her verse emotionally, this particular verse lacked that aspect. Certain did enough regarding flow while also matching conceptually. Good shit kids.