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Old 03-23-2013, 10:56 AM   #2
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Good story, only comment is that perhaps the descriptive scene setting at the start went for too long, maybe would have been stronger to bring in the reminiscing part earlier or split it up and have a small reminiscing part at the start as well. Especially enjoyed the skillful execution of the conclusion, gave a good ending to the content but also raised some commentary to make us think.
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