Netcees - View Single Post - Week 14 contender match: 3. Adonis (6-7) vs. 4. zygote (10-3) \\ zygote wins 6-2

King Ra. · 06-02-2014, 12:29 AM

Interesting match up. Very different directions. Adonis, I'm kinda surprised I guess, at your style this week, it isn't vintage Adon like we've seen in prior weeks, and that's not to say your piece is horrible, just sharing a thought I had when I got through reading. Very touchy subject matter here. Mass shootings have been shaking this nation rampantly the last few years and you took this idea and wrote a story from your perspective of the shooter. I guess this is relating to that recent incident? Getting to the meat of your piece, I thought it was okay. It didn't wow me, it didn't disappoint me, but it was... okay. I think it's missing that signature Adon presentation and deft touch. It would've been interesting to see a more clever spin, you've wrote some very good pieces this season and I felt this was lacking that crazy, raw Adon-esque presentation. Overall, this was well written, a fresh idea from your perspective of a mass shooter and his personal feelings, thoughts. Zygote, the man of many styles. You seem to never disappoint in terms of entertainment because readers never know exactly what to expect except for some creative and original and you've taken major strides this season. Motivation for success. I thought this was a very fresh take. Entertaining read from start to finish. Schemes and mechanics were basic at best, but this was more of how you put together a dialogue of a motivational speaker which I felt I was right in his presentation. All in all, a cool piece this week.

I felt Adonis took a step back a bit, I was expecting something of the lines like he did last week, which I felt was one of the better of his pieces this season. His take on the topic was good, touching on a deep problem in our society, but I felt it lacked a bit in presentation and the writing was standard. Writing was standard as well for Zyg but what gives this match to him is the more creative take on the topic. Both were even in just about every other aspect, so creativity was the deciding factor here for me.

MVGT: Zygote. Good job by both competitors.

06-02-2014, 12:29 AM	#1
King Ra. The Throne, The Crown Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,667 Battle Record: 21-35 Rep Power: 1932963	Interesting match up. Very different directions. Adonis, I'm kinda surprised I guess, at your style this week, it isn't vintage Adon like we've seen in prior weeks, and that's not to say your piece is horrible, just sharing a thought I had when I got through reading. Very touchy subject matter here. Mass shootings have been shaking this nation rampantly the last few years and you took this idea and wrote a story from your perspective of the shooter. I guess this is relating to that recent incident? Getting to the meat of your piece, I thought it was okay. It didn't wow me, it didn't disappoint me, but it was... okay. I think it's missing that signature Adon presentation and deft touch. It would've been interesting to see a more clever spin, you've wrote some very good pieces this season and I felt this was lacking that crazy, raw Adon-esque presentation. Overall, this was well written, a fresh idea from your perspective of a mass shooter and his personal feelings, thoughts. Zygote, the man of many styles. You seem to never disappoint in terms of entertainment because readers never know exactly what to expect except for some creative and original and you've taken major strides this season. Motivation for success. I thought this was a very fresh take. Entertaining read from start to finish. Schemes and mechanics were basic at best, but this was more of how you put together a dialogue of a motivational speaker which I felt I was right in his presentation. All in all, a cool piece this week. I felt Adonis took a step back a bit, I was expecting something of the lines like he did last week, which I felt was one of the better of his pieces this season. His take on the topic was good, touching on a deep problem in our society, but I felt it lacked a bit in presentation and the writing was standard. Writing was standard as well for Zyg but what gives this match to him is the more creative take on the topic. Both were even in just about every other aspect, so creativity was the deciding factor here for me. MVGT: Zygote. Good job by both competitors. __________________ Vetwork, bitches.