3 - crazy dense with rhyme schemes. my main qualm was that not much was developed beyond the language and wording. it was a very aesthetically pleasing read but there the final stanza (which was great) sort of was a tl;dr of the whole piece, a lot of redundancy in the meat of the piece. as playoffs approach perhaps trade in those assaulting schemes for more substance
ck - original piece, compelling wording. the story progressed more than threeps, while i liked his flows alot more i think i got more out of reading your piec than his
v - cereal
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