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Old 06-01-2014, 07:28 AM   #5
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Patrown had nice multiple rhymes and poetic phrases, Soulstice had a more engrossing overall story. Good discussion of escapism, the child in the story uses the phantasy world to escape from the reality of the father's abuse. Its pretty straightfoward, but its effective and the fantasy language is interesting. Patrown was more abstract, kind of a train of thought narrative style. Liked the word 'pondscum' - never seen that one before. Voting for Soulstice.
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