Kind of like a monologue from JM, didn't enjoy the preachy tone. Each sentence is very short and there are not that many words in between the rhyming phrases, but it was effective because the rhyming phrases didn't seem awkward or unnatural. For CK it's interesting and part of its appeal comes from the ambiguity. It would be nice to have a more cohesive thread throughout, some more concrete themes tying it all together, something that I can pinpoint like 'this was about such and such a thing.' Maybe that would simplify it and it would lose some of its mystique/effectiveness. Not sure. Voting for CK.
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