CK - Interesting use of advanced wording and eccentric subject matter. The way I was interpreted this was that a Chinese rice paddy worker aspires to move to the UK or the US but he has cancer so he can't. Another worker comes to him and shows him his own progress since he intends to immigrate. The discovery of black rice could be the omen he was so desperately looking for, while the first worker is destined to deal with monotony while others reap the happy seeds of life abroad. I thought it was a good verse but I desired a stronger dosage of character identity and less ambiguity with the ending inscription.
Jonathan Mercy - I liked this less than your other pieces you've written for this league for two reasons: 1. It was too mechanical and lacked personable energy due to the heavy technical language, terms. 2. Writer vs. Corrupted and Confused Religious Zealots wasn't the most refreshing approach you could've taken. I thought it was written well and it rhymed in stellar fashion but it wasn't anything captivating. I enjoyed CK's more this week. It felt too...psychiatric evaluation for me, and while it's worthy of further analysis, it didn't have a pronounced entertainment value, which matters IMO.
My vote goes to CK.
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