[Adonis]

Merc and ck, dope battle,I enjoyed both.

Merc went deep, essentially talking shit about humans in general. You did something I noticed and loved, when you made a list of horrible shit only subtle,with flow and enjoyable content.
us irrational, puzzled, panicky, jumpy
anthropomorphic, cannabis-muddled
vanity-governed, outstandingly stubborn
- psychotically affable monkeys and addicts of comfort
A mental obsession... that expands in us lovely
- literal motherfuckers and masochist munchkin

Now, I like this because it gives you way to use different words in rhyme, as these are not complete sentences. What I disliked was the "in" just before quoted section. I thought using the run on sentence was rather lazy, even though it was followed but fire, and I'm sure you tried to adjust our fix it. Maybe not. If so, you failed, again followed but fire though. Enjoyed verse and take on topic,maybe even lack there of. You essentially changed the topic, or at the very least used it as a blanket statement instead of literal. Either way good shit faggot.

Ck. "write off " bro. I took this as a open face book. I pictured a old Asian man literally working the fields. "if I sift I sit" culminated some powerful imagery and emotion as you had me imagining the joy a slave would get being able to sit and work. I did not however, like the connection to topic. To me,you detailed the trials of a rice picking slave, then in the end another man found the rare black rice. For me,if you would have expressed the dudes happiness in finding the kernel the take on topic would be salvageable.

In the end, I just think Merc had the better verse. Ck's left me feeling a bit empty, like you explained something but there was no finisher in terms of high or low emotion. Just ended with another man being lucky. Where Merc had a massive amount of content hating on my brothers.