cyph her- I'm not sure how I feel about this. I like this in certain parts. The overall piece felt incomplete, like an excerpt. I liked the metaphors for the two yous and the connections, with memories interwoven. I feel like a better plan on that would have had greater results. Not sure if I know what I'm saying. Good job tho.
Zen- LOL on that ending. That last stanza felt like a mood killer. if theis was real life, OK thats what really happened. But it felt like some kinda funky B-List druggy movie with an almost cliche ending. I dug the first half a lot. A lot of potential there. Welcome back bro. Good job overall.
MVGT Zen for his first half grabbing my attention so well, even if the ending fell off a little.
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