[Cereal_Killa]

Zygote:

Reminds me a bit like one of Red Glares old verses.. A lil over killed, kinda as if you where carrying too much weight this week and needed to flush it, this i think is the problem.. you appear in the general sense to be trying a new style/or sharpen your poetic stances but i’ve read your writing and this is..
1# either you needed to dot point a whole heap of things for future writing..
or
2# just what’s in your life and in your head atm


which is coo

Soul:

Closing line in the opening stanza.. brings the anger straight at the babies head.. Kinda like a shotgun.. you’re not a hobo are you..

“Lit by the infinite lights across the weight of the galaxy”


Screeching as it careens through the weather - blizzarding storms
Outside, a Nordic castle, couldn't be seen for a minute or more

To me the drilling into the childs head with all the pop culture blah blah.. LIKEEEEE you where trying to pop each one that came through Zygotes on a richote..
Not my favourite guys..

Vote: soulstice

purely what the intro represented..

g/l guys..