Good stuff by both. Zenland has more advanced rhyme schemes, cyp her was more thorough in addressing a single central theme. Disliked the gimmicky @symbol thing, also disliked the narration and the how the character was presented, it wasn't lovable underdog or ultimate despair, it was somewhere inbetween. It could have been stronger to polarize the character more. Good attempt at humor here and there. I actually really like cyphers writing here, its wonderfully clear and refreshingly simple. Both wrote about the same topic pretty much, but while Zenland went for a humorous approach and misfired, cypher went for a direct approach and nailed it. Voting for cyph her.
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