Story versus topical. This is a tough one to decide on. You both excelled in your respective directions. And you both also lacked where the other gained. Jonathan, your diction was strong. You have a deft touch with your vocabulary and use it very well. You did take a direct approach to the picture, but I felt the perspective kept this from being to vague. I don't necessarily know who "She" refers to, but I figure it could be a goddess of war, war itself or something within human nature. Whatever it is, you did a nice job descriptively. I would have liked a bit more depth though, because it does feel like more could be added, but I can't complain much, it still is a solid read overall. Soulstice, you took the story route. More interesting approach. Dialogue and action were the driving force of your piece. Kept me intrigued throughout. Whereas JM used the picture directly, you took a more fresher approach, using this scene of war to describe what apparently is a drug war or something. Pretty cool. Content and concept were strong. A bit more character description could have helped, and better dialogue distinction. But an enjoyable read though, good stuff.
As I said before, this one is tough. One one side, a well written topical with good diction and description. The other side an action packed story in the middle of some drug war. Soulstice had the fresher approach, and JM took a more safe, direct route. Where I draw the line is the dialogue in Soulstice piece and not enough clarity with the story. It had the content, but didn't feel it tied as well to the topic as much as JM's, which wasn't as much an exciting read, but the writing was good and he rounded his piece much better to the picture given here.
MVGT: Johnathan Mercy. Good job by both competitors.
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