Certain came with a lot of great content here, the wordplay made the flow fall off a couple times though. Can’t decide if I enjoy your ending, as well as your approach to the topic but it wasn’t bad at all. As a whole I enjoyed it. I think the invisible woman line was key. Painted a picture of a guy sitting behind his computer on the road chatting to some girl he never met or hopes to meet, basically. Stressing out with it. I’m sure there’s more to it. Vulgar came the same as Certain, focusing more on the content and wordplay then and actual underlying story. Vulgar tied his concept together in the first few bars and brought it back to life in the end. Your concept for the topic was cool, “Life's a science project - a teenage assimilation of versions of events”, pretty much sums up the topic itself. Enjoyed how you displayed the ‘science project’ throughout your verse, if that’s what was intended. felt you rhymed better than Certain, flow etc. Still a bit was obviously forced. Also finished reading with more of an impact and satisfaction than I did with your opponent.
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