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Old 05-17-2014, 04:14 PM   #8
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Perp- Awesome start to this. The first twelve or so lines were nearly perfect. As this progressed though I think the writing got a little more choppy in terms of matching up syllable counts like you did in the beginning. The content got off track to me as well, specifically the Gaffigan line. Still, I enjoyed this and I'm sure you're an alias now.

Adonis- Hope you don't mind hepatitis...Sorry. Skull fucking made me think of Saints Row. This was your usual style your poetic bastard. Great use of descriptive language, and I liked how this (to me at least) seemed like it was building up to something...which was skull fucking. That's how you define epic ness. I dug it.

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It was close. If Perp had finished strong like the start of his verse he would've won easily I think. Good stuff.
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