Dope battle. Definitely a sleeper. You both did the damn thing. Perp, the imagery was very strong in your piece, and you did a great job with the descriptions throughout your story. The "black" usage was creative, and you used good language to tie it all together. I was drawn in from the start. I'd say it lost a bit of steam in the second section, but nothing really drastic. Adonis, this is definitely the best piece you've written this season, hands down. It sort of has that feel of an action epic. That opening stanza set the tone and you rode that momentum all the way through. The flow was tight-knit. You had your signature style, but sprinkled a fresh wrinkle. Very descriptive piece, was feeling how you strung together some nice phrases. Epic approved, indeed.
Very good match up. Loved both pieces and the directions you both took. This decision for me comes down to which story drew me in more because you both did well mechanically. Perp had great imagery, Adon had dope descriptions. When I read Perps piece, I thought he'd done enough to take this, but then I got into Adon and immediately became captivated from start to finish. This was a huge statement here.
MVGT: Adonis. Good job by both competitors.
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