[Adonis]

V - My first thought is...You were so focused on strength of rhyme or difficulty, or even the crispness of it, you over shot. What I mean is. There are. These crazy breaks in sentences for rhyming's sake. While you also would begin sentence. Mid way through a bar so you could. Keep. Rhyme. I'm just used to the Vulgar who didn't rhyme and went philosophical topical in the classical fashion. You picked up immensely 4-5 bars deep....Heel raising tension...Great use of imagery, maybe a bit of idiom, either way word choice flowed but the depth in words is well cocked, aimed and...Bulls eye. ...Tail bone beat me to the stairs, stand for yourself...is another dope example, sick writing friend, I missed you, this a throwback Vulgar with so many references and just pure knowledge in rap forum, top forum. All in all I think I said it all, you wrote a magnificent verse aside from the chopped, greatly and sorely chopped (imo) beginning, but if that's what you have to do to set up a flow laden, endlessly deep verse that just drips knowledge, then by all means.


Cert First off, not a shot in a hell. You went easy this week, I assume by the closer and the fact that you went a tad personal and in the words of big-baby, wrote a bitch made topical crying, about being burnt out, poor and struggling with women shit. Decent writing, you too far to often broke up lines because it's easier to rhyme that way, I'm noticing a theme with all writers this season. Anyways, there was a nice back and forth feel to this verse, a hint of dark imagery which you def could have expounded upon for effect, but alas, you posted what you had because you the tank is on E

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