[Certain]

Cereal_Killa: Your diction manages to be both your best friend and worst enemy. It sets you apart from anyone else, the endlessly obtuse poetry that you ride on without hesitation. But it also leaves the readers occasionally straining to make sense of your words, particularly in attaching any real-world value to the stories you're telling. There's no denying this verse was beautiful, but the disconnects made it so that it would be very difficult for anyone to tell exactly what it's about. Some of that can be chalked up to art for art's sake, but in a league with assigned topics, there comes the issue of relating to those topics. So what was "the only thing"? The second and third reads shed light on that: I believe what you were going for was the fragility of new life and the passing of lineage. I'm not sure you told a story about a snake at all but rather about the brokenness of losing a child and how it blindsides us. I do wish there was more clarity to justify my thought, but I did enjoy this verse because of the unique stylings, even as they perhaps distracted from it's core.

Adonis: You executed your gimmick much better this week, thanks largely to your clean writing in the more action-heavy parts. You had a clearer narrative, and that was evident and kept your verse more focused even as you threw in all sorts of distractions. The bigger issue is that this verse read not as a parody (because of a lack of poignancy toward world events) but as a comedy, and it definitely wasn't funny. What I liked and what will earn you my vote is that you took the topic head on and let the absurdism of your scenario speak for itself. You never bothered to tell us what they were fighting for because it didn't matter. Still, this verse does not reflect the quality of submissions you showed earlier in the season.

Vote: Adonis