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Zygote: I don't watch Game of Thrones, but I imagine I would have liked this verse much more if I did. I scooby dooby scooby dooby do watch Vikings though, and I enjoyed this a lot. There was something theatrical, almost shakespearian to this. It felt like a scene from a play, not so much from a novel. I enjoy that atmosphere you create, though the writing itself was a little tough for me, like you just so happened to rhyme. I know you're capable of rhyming extremely well, but in this instance I would have liked to see you bust those out a bit more. Also, didn't like how often you found a rhyme with a made-up (I think?) word or name, felt a little cheap. Overall, a liked the story a lot, but at this point I'd like to see stronger rhyming and/or more fluid wording and rhythm to match your excellent storytelling.

Zombie: Your writing is always dope, lots of schemes and original descriptions. It's hard for me to find anything I didn't like outright, but I felt a little underwhelmed I guess. I enjoyed the avenues you took me down, and the grab bag of allusions made it provocative in a way. I don't know, there was just something missing.


Vote: This is particularly difficult, because I didn't really get "it" from either verse. I liked zyg's story more, but I liked zombie's writing more. overall, I think the disparity between what I didn't like in both verses favors zombie; his idea, while scattered, was better than the weak points of zygote's writing. close call though, wouldn't be surprised to see either win.