[Adonis]

Mr. Top Draw - "Simple Ingvar grins dumbly at the shoreline;" this is a great opener for so many reasons, but mostly because it's just pure, solid, great wording. Dope narrative, I don't often enjoy the style of old we coined "paragraph style", but once in a while it can be refreshing. It's funny that was easy writing in terms of rhyme and flow, while most would consider rhyming a natural conversation is the toughest; yet you chose to rhyme there more rather then the intro. Nicely done. Overall, you did a great job in all aspects. You presented me with a nice setting, even a bit of background into ingvar as well as other characters, but you did so with brevity, yet enough for me to enjoy it. Dope verse, one of the better by you this season, might be my favorite. (From you)


Zom - This is a nice read that I enjoyed for the most part. But I didn't like you breaking a sentence into two bars for flow. Some times it worked, others it didn't. The entire 2nd stanza, well at least before the dopamine part, is my example. It just clustered for me, you also didn't even put periods which in turn made it more confusing because I wasn't sure if you were breaking sentences or stopping without period. Overall though, this verse is some good writing/not flow, but solid fuckin writing. I enjoyed the peer into a mans head who is just plain kray. Good shit.


This is a tough vote, I think you both did things very well...Ziggie with a nice story and solid rhyming and cohesiveness for a conversational verse. Zombie had a mood to his that was felt while connecting to the topic much better than his counter part while also just dropping knowledge.

In the end, I enjoyed Zygote's verse more as far as personal preference.

Vote Ziggie