cert- original stuff here. there were a lot of parts where you developed imagery where I wish you went into backstory instead. perhaps be more economic in your storytelling when it comes to writing with such limitations. that didnt take away from my enjoyment of the piece through, it was interesting, and I enjoyed the human death of the robot, as well as the whore house being located on a "tertiary moon". It gave it a black-market like location, perhaps the robots are illegal as well? gives a lot of itneresting dimensions to the world and character that I wish were explored more. maybe im being greedy.
vague - this was a fun read. The dick-measuring syndrome in all men was explored pretty well ("keep careers afloat", etc.) and things like 'bare-handed bearhunting' were enjoyable as well. flow was especially good in the first stanza, an onslaught of hyperbolic manliness and flow.
in a battle of who could be more whimsical and out-there, concept wise, I have to give it to certain. honestly, if he didn't use the word 'tertiary' which made my mind run to all sorts of fill-in-the-blank scenarios, i might've voted for Vague. funny how that works.
v - Certain
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