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Zygote. Really enjoyed this. I thought that your rhyme schemes weren't very tight but everything was worded fluidly. It seems to be your strategy in the AOWL and storytelling tournaments to sacrifice lyricism for coherency and also plot detail. Good story, I enjoyed how you introduced the scholar in the midst of the chaos, and with his soliloquy you showed how he silenced the room.

Ingvar would be a good king because he trusts his subjects to support him & add to the stength of his demesne


Gotta finivofe on my kPfopsh

EDIT: now voting from my kPfopsh.


I thought that Zygote's story was well balanced between the characters actions and the scholar's speech, because his speech was meant to be very powerful and the center of the whole thing, and I imagine that it was unprecedented by Vikings. Though I only know the stereotypes of Vikings being brutes and not much else.

Zombie.

interesting writing. really fully fleshed out delve into the psyche of a schizophrenic. I think the emotional connection you demonstrated to the cast of characters and the shades of self were very intricate. I am over generalizing. I could talk a lot about the microcosms (split8 buzzword forever) you brought up in the webs of details in this verse.


honestly, the two writings seem almost incomparable. I don't know, maybe it's the waves of attentiveness I get on off-weekends but I really clicked with Zygote's story and the swath of his individual brush strokes this week, I thought that while his writing was mostly descriptionless and plain it was powerful in an oratory sense (the scholar's speech was properly highlighted and skillful).


v/ zygote