CK, your opening was dope, particularly the first 4 lines. Halfway through got annoyed by the big font, hard to keep a flow. Your multis were simplistic for the most part, a few lines were dope though. Your story was hard to get going, thought it could be more effective if it was about half the lengh.
A, Your flow was on point this week, a smooth, great read. you seem to be on a roll with these underlying gimmicks in your verses. I did enjoy this a lot though. Could work out great for a kids story, and I mean that with the best intentions. Not a bad read, one of the better pieces I’ve read from you.
v. Adonis for the more enjoyable read. Had CK been less descriptive it would’ve been a toss up. Good battle.
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